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People tend to skip their meales for many reasons.
Some people are too busy to eat their regular meals.
Other people choose to skip their meals to reduce their weights.
I think skipping meals is not good for our health.
Proper energy, as a form of glucose, is provided to keep our brain working.
If someone skip their meals repetitively, they cannot focus on their work, and cannot act effectively.
Also, sufficient nutrients cannot be provided.
Therefore, they will have various symptoms due to nutrient deprivation.

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Hi there, Stella! Thank you for always doing your best in our lessons, as well as in answering the homework I'm giving you. I am grateful for your participation and willingness to actively share a lot of your ideas in the class, as well as in your homework. We will keep on doing various activities in the class. See you there! ~ T. Marie ^^ 
People tend to skip their meales for many reasons.
>> People tend to skip meals for many reasons. 
Some people are too busy to eat their regular meals.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
Other people choose to skip their meals to reduce their weights.
>> Other people choose to skip their meals to reduce their weight. 
I think skipping meals is not good for our health.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
Proper energy, as a form of glucose, is provided to keep our brain working.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
If someone skip their meals repetitively, they cannot focus on their work, and cannot act effectively.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
Also, sufficient nutrients cannot be provided.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
Therefore, they will have various symptoms due to nutrient deprivation.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
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