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what are your thoughts on teen celebrities promoting luxury brands?

작성자: 손*림
2023-09-10 985

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First, i wrote it for Korean and then i used Papago to translate.. so it can be a little strangeTT so.. please save my essay.. lol..

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for your homework, Hanah!

Keep going and never stop!

-Hanna ^^


As the title suggests, it is often seen that teenage idols like Ive and New Gins are advertising luxury brands these days. 

>>As the title suggests, it is often seen that teenage idols like "Ive" and "New Gins" are promoting luxury brands these days.

As the news and articles report, as advertising models are our age, there is a negative aspect that teenagers are finding it too easy to buy expensive luxury goods. 

>>As reported in news articles and advertisements, when individuals of our age serve as models, there is a negative aspect: teenagers are often tempted to purchase expensive luxury goods too easily.

Many parents often complain about children asking for luxury brand advertisements.

>>Many parents often complain about children asking for luxury brand products from the advertisements.

Advertisers can also see this phenomenon, making teenagers want to buy more luxury goods.

>>Correct!

Of course, advertising with very expensive clothes and necklaces by one's peers can cause a desire to buy and be an object of envy.

>>Correct!

However, I don't think it is desirable to prevent teenage idols from advertising luxury brands.

>>Correct!

Just because you put forward this argument doesn't mean you won't be interested in it because it doesn't mean that you don't want to pay attention.

>>Just because you present this argument doesn't mean you're not interested in it or that you don't want to pay attention.

Therefore, I think proper education at home is a priority.

>>Correct!

Most teenagers who buy luxury goods don't make money and don't know how hard it is to make money. 

>>Correct!

Therefore, I think families should develop an economic idea about consumption. 

>>Correct!

Also, when you decide to buy a luxury brand because your child wants it so much, you should not buy it right away and make efforts to keep some promises before you buy a luxury brand. 

>>Also, when you decide to purchase a luxury brand because your child desires it greatly, it's advisable not to buy it immediately and instead make an effort to fulfill certain commitments before going in a luxury shopping.

I don't think it's desirable to think that our children will want to buy it because a teenage idol advertises recklessly.

>> I don't think it's desirable to think that our children will want to make purchases simply because a teenage idol promotes them excessively.

Therefore, my opinion is that I hope that this controversy itself will be eliminated as appropriate education is provided at home. 

>>Correct!

Thank you for listening my speech.

>>Thank you for listening to my speech.

First, i wrote it for Korean and then i used Papago to translate.. so it can be a little strangeTT 

>>I wrote it first in Korean then I used Papago to translate it so it can be a little strange.

so.. please save my essay.. lol..

>>So please help me with my essay.
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