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Some believe that younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting older family members when they become physically, mentally and financially unable to look after themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I agree with this people. children are some duties that support their parents.
When they were young, parents are blacked them by dangerous such as addiction, murder, and hungry.
So, When they were old, Children must be support them by problem such as no jobs, no money, and no medical care.
But this care is very hard because of economical problems. So, i think that goverment helps them by welfare law.

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Hi there Lee! Good job for your essay writing! Keep it up! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
I agree with this people.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 children are some duties that support their parents.
>>> Children are responsible for supporting their parents. 
When they were young, parents are blacked them by dangerous such as addiction, murder, and hungry.
>>> When they were young, parents protected them from dangerous activities such as addiction, murder, and starvation.
So, When they were old, Children must be support them by problem such as no jobs, no money, and no medical care.
>>> So, when they get older, children must support them because of no jobs, no money, and no medical care.
But this care is very hard because of economical problems. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
So, i think that goverment helps them by welfare law.
>>> So, I think, the government should help the elderly by the welfare law.
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