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How would you convince someone to travel?

I tell to him. what is the advantages of traveling

there are a lot of benefit
first, You can get experience whether it is good or bad. I think it will help you.
next, You make friend each contries
finally, You can eat the traditional food of the travel destination. It will make you happy.

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You wrote your ideas clearly, Min! Good job! Your answers are persuasive because they are all realistic. See you!-Faith-
How would you convince someone to travel?
>> CORRECT
I tell to him. what is the advantages of traveling
>> I will tell him the advantages of traveling.
there are a lot of benefit
>> In fact, there are lots of benefits.
first, You can get experience whether it is good or bad. I think it will help you.
>> First, you can get experiences whether it is good or bad and I think it will help you.
OR First, you can get good or bad experiences, and they will be helpful to you.
next, You make friend each contries
>> Next, you can make friends in each country you visit.
finally, You can eat the traditional food of the travel destination. It will make you happy.
>> Finally, you can eat the traditional food of your travel destination, and it will make you happy.
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