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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Should university education be free?

In my opinion, the education cost should be more reasonable instead of free.
Because, first of all university education cost is too expensive.
There are many people feel the pressure because the cost of education.
Some people try to borrow money for education or get scholarships.
In addition, another problem is low quality education as much as the education cost.
And, low-quality universities in S.Korea are disappearing these days.
The reason why, their has problem like a cost, decrease in population.
To sum up, I think the cost of university education should be reasonable cost.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Should university education be free?

In my opinion, the education cost should be more reasonable instead of free.
>> CORRECT!
Because, first of all university education cost is too expensive.
>> CORRECT!
There are many people feel the pressure because the cost of education.
>> There are many people who feel the pressure because of the cost of education.
Some people try to borrow money for education or get scholarships.
>> CORRECT!
In addition, another problem is low quality education as much as the education cost.
>> CORRECT!
And, low-quality universities in S.Korea are disappearing these days.
>> And, low-quality universities in South Korea are disappearing these days.
The reason why, their has problem like a cost, decrease in population.
>> The reasons are because of problems like the cost, and decrease in population.
To sum up, I think the cost of university education should be reasonable cost.
>> To sum up, I think the cost of university education should be at a reasonable cost.

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