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When i first meet someone, i try to search our similarities. And if i found out the that, i would talk to him or her about that topic. So i mean there is no specific topic i try to talk about when i meet someone first time. It is important to find out our similarities

I believe the main topic varies depending on the age usually. If someone is under 20th, their main topic would be studying. But if they are from 20 - 30, their main topic would be marriage or saving up money. So if i met someone for first time, i would check his or her age at first and then i would tell them main topic related to their age¡¯s concerns

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You sensibly explained your stand and I like it, Jun! Please capitalize the pronoun 'I' all the time even if it's in the middle of the sentence.-Faith-
When i first meet someone, i try to search our similarities. 
>> When I first meet someone, I try to search for our similarities. 
And if i found out the that, i would talk to him or her about that topic. 
>> If I found out our similarity, I would talk to him or her about that topic.
So i mean there is no specific topic i try to talk about when i meet someone first time. 
>> Therefore, there is no specific topic I want to try to talk about when I meet someone for the first time. 
It is important to find out our similarities
>> It is important to find out our similarities.
I believe the main topic varies depending on the age usually. 
>> CORRECT
If someone is under 20th, their main topic would be studying. 
>> If someone is under 20, their main topic will be studying. 
But if they are from 20 - 30, their main topic would be marriage or saving up money. 
>> However, if they are in their 20s to 30s, their main topic will be marriage or saving up money. 
So if i met someone for first time, i would check his or her age at first and then i would tell them main topic related to their age¡¯s concerns
>> Thus, if I met someone for the first time, I would check his or her age first, and then I would tell them the main topic related to their age concerns.
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