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Hi.
How was your day?
After morning class, I rolled on bed for a long time.
Around 12AM, my wife and I went to a restaurant which has a great menu of grilled beef.
We met my friend's couple there and we had a lunch with them, and then all we went to a coffee shop which one of my friends owns.
Since one of my friends opened this shop, my wife and I visited there many times before.
We couldn't see the owner(my friend) because the shop serves a coffee so cheap by self-service.
Arriving at home, I practiced a guitar and went to an academy.
I learned some guitar skills and I really enjoyed it.
Right after that, I went to a hotel and met my friend who ate a lunch with me again.
We worked out at gym and enjoyed sauna.
And, I ate a dinner with my family at home and played Nintendo with my kids.
Regarding my homework, I think that every man has a unique temper and character.
Typically, we use the term "mature" as a meaning of socialization.
However, Dr. MJ never change, I guess.
See you.

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Good day, Dr. Kim!

I was hyper productive yesterday I must say but you topped that and today, your physical condition may be pretty tired but I guess, you are fulfilled. We call this living life- doing what we want. It is good to feel tired about good things we choose to do.

Meeting friends can give us joy by haring perspective and views about children, career, and  life in general. I envy you in this part. I have a few friends and they are overseas.

So, how is your guitar skills lately? The new techniques can let you play new songs. Keep strumming.

Intense work out and sauna, and still having the energy to play with your kids is just an amazing energy! All these activities suit you well. I think your Wednesday endorphin, oxytocin, dopamine, among other happy hormones are all highly activated due to your work out.

Now, maturity includes learning to trust others, trust yourself, and how to decide who not to trust. We sometimes choose to learn this the hard way.

I am grateful that you submitted this homework in spite of your loaded schedule yesterday. There are some suggestions that you may want to take a look at below. Read them carefully.

You have done a very good job!

I will see you soon.

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

After morning class, I rolled on bed for a long time.
>> Correct!

Around 12AM, my wife and I went to a restaurant which has a great menu of grilled beef.
>> Correct! 

We met my friend's couple there and we had a lunch with them, and then all we went to a coffee shop which one of my friends owns.
>> We met my couple friends there and we had lunch with them, and then we all went to a coffee shop which my friends owns.

Since one of my friends opened this shop, my wife and I visited there many times before.
>> Correct!

We couldn't see the owner(my friend) because the shop serves a coffee so cheap by self-service.
>> We couldn't see the owner(my friend) because the shop serves coffee so cheap by self-service.

Arriving at home, I practiced a guitar and went to an academy.
>> Arriving at home, I practiced playing the guitar and went to an academy.

I learned some guitar skills and I really enjoyed it.
>> Correct!

Right after that, I went to a hotel and met my friend who ate a lunch with me again.
>> Right after that, I went to a hotel and met my friend who ate lunch with me again.

We worked out at gym and enjoyed sauna.
>> We worked out in the gym and enjoyed sauna.

And, I ate a dinner with my family at home and played Nintendo with my kids.
>> Correct!

Regarding my homework, I think that every man has a unique temper and character.
>> Correct!

Typically, we use the term "mature" as a meaning of socialization.
>> Correct!

However, Dr. MJ never change, I guess.
>> However, Dr. MJ never changed, I guess.

See you.
>> Correct!
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