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I think experienced and flexible people ride the flow of change better.

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I think experienced and flexible people ride the flow of change better.
If you have a lot of experience but are not flexible, you are likely to be tied to the moment, and if you are flexible but have no experience, you will be swept in the wrong direction.
However, if you have a soft and free way of thinking through various experiences, you can easily find your own pace while melting into change more naturally.

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Hello Da Hye,

Great work on completing your homework! I really appreciate your thoughtful insights on the topic of experience and flexibility in navigating change. You've expressed these ideas beautifully. Keep up the excellent work, and I'm here to support your learning journey every step of the way.

~Teacher Cathy


I think experienced and flexible people ride the flow of change better.

>>I believe that experienced and flexible people adapt to change better.

If you have a lot of experience but are not flexible, you are likely to be tied to the moment, and if you are flexible but have no experience, you will be swept in the wrong direction.

>>CORRECT

OR>>If you have a lot of experience but are not flexible, you are likely to be stuck in the moment. Conversely, if you are flexible but lack experience, you might be carried in the wrong direction.

However, if you have a soft and free way of thinking through various experiences, you can easily find your own pace while melting into change more naturally.

>>CORRECT

OR>>However, if you have an open-minded and adaptable way of thinking gained through various experiences, you can easily find your own pace while integrating into change more naturally.

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