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Hi.
It's already past midnight.
Today was also hectic just like yesterday.
In addition, there was an argument with Dr. MJ this morning, and it made me feel bad all day.
Despite of his day-off, he wanted to talke about the expected revenue today, and I refused it politely, and then he was upset.
We both knew that we didn't make enough money last Wednesday and he talked about it many times.
Of course, he didn't mean to blame to me, but I became be sick of talking about profit on his day-off.
I think that he just worried about the profit, but he shouldn't have done that way.
He often told me that I am very emotional and I totally agreed with that.
However, he is also emotional and has an urgent temper.
Sometimes, he couldn't stand his anger and expressed it to others without ample consideration.
Nevertheless, he is a good friend and teacher of mine, I think.
He has a great ability to arrange many work, raise a productivity of others, and keep his routine job consistently.
See you soon.

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Good afternoon, Dr. Kim!

You have been working so hard nowadays. I salute you for your passion and dedication to your calling. Today, just forget about everything and have a respite from your busy life. 

A hectic schedule is aggravated by professional relationship issues. I guess, what Dr. MJ wants to tell you is to go back to a 7-day work week. I may be wrong but if he is acting very uncomfortable and unreasonable in his ways of asking about the profit during Tuesdays (when he is off from work) and Wednesdays (when you are off from work) then, I understand this as such.

Truly, unstable financial status puts people in uncomfortable situation and the result is poor or miscommunication due to this stressful condition.

Typically, human beings are susceptible to  emotional challenges especially anger.  I hope that you can learn to put on a poker face to neutralize the situation. Although I am not sure if this is applicable to the Korean working culture, in my experience in intense events, when one is mad, I stay composed and focus on the task rather than the anger. Only then, we can achieve success. 

You will have many difficult days with Dr. MJ. This is the reality. But then, since you mastered sympathy and empathy, you will always find a way to balance his anger with your gentleness. Stay patient and always be the bigger person. 

You have longer sentences and they have slight suggestions. Thank you for this very good attempts. Your vocabulary and style are so special.

See you later!

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

It's already past midnight.
>> Correct!

Today was also hectic just like yesterday.
>> Correct!

In addition, there was an argument with Dr. MJ this morning, and it made me feel bad all day.
>> Correct!

Despite of his day-off, he wanted to talke about the expected revenue today, and I refused it politely, and then he was upset.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

We both knew that we didn't make enough money last Wednesday and he talked about it many times.
>> Correct!

Of course, he didn't mean to blame to me, but I became be sick of talking about profit on his day-off.
>>Of course, he didn't mean to blame to me, but I became sick of talking about profit on his day-off.

I think that he just worried about the profit, but he shouldn't have done that way.
>> I think that he is just worried about the profit, but he shouldn't have done it that way.

He often told me that I am very emotional and I totally agreed with that.
>> Correct!
Or: 
He often told me that I am very emotional and I totally agree with that.


However, he is also emotional and has an urgent temper.
>> Correct!

Sometimes, he couldn't stand his anger and expressed it to others without ample consideration.
>> Correct!

Nevertheless, he is a good friend and teacher of mine, I think.
>> Correct!

He has a great ability to arrange many work, raise a productivity of others, and keep his routine job consistently.
>> Correct!

See you soon.
>> Correct!
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