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Q: Why is playing sports necessary for other people?
A: I think playing sports is necessary for other people because it's about their health.
If they don't play sports, their health will get worse, but if they play them, their health will get better.
I think health is one of the most important things for a person.

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Hi, Paul!

 

Thank you for answering your homework!

 

~T. Divina^^

 

Here are some things to take note of:



1. I think playing sports is necessary for other people because it's about their health.

>>CORRECT!

OR>>I think playing sports is necessary for other people because it helps them with their health.



2. If they don't play sports, their health will get worse, but if they play them, their health will get better.

>>CORRECT!

OR>>If they don't play sports, their health will get worse. However, if they play them, their health will get better.



3. I think health is one of the most important things for a person.

>>CORRECT!

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