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I prefer spending my free time doing exercise.
Recently, I\'m interested in partipating in pilates classes, because it alleviates my should and waist discomfort.
Also, on weekends I enjoy climbing the mountain near my house.
During spring season, I could observe various flowers in the mountain.
In contrast, I admire the scenery with red or yellow-colored leaves on autumn.
Like this, I like to do outdoor activities, but, I prefer enjoying indoor activities to outdoor activities.
There are too many variables to do outdoor activites according to the weather.
When it rains outside, it is difficult to do outdoor activities.
In addition, summer is too hot and humid to go outside, and winter is so cold that I love to stay indoors.

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Hi there, Stella! Thank you so much for doing such a great job in answering this homework. I appreciate your effort in sharing your ideas in this homework. We will continue to practice more in class. See you there! ~ T. Marie ^^ 
I prefer spending my free time doing exercise.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
Recently, I\'m interested in partipating in pilates classes, because it alleviates my should and waist discomfort.
>> Recently, I'm interested in partipating in pilates classes because it alleviates my shoulder and waist discomfort. 
Also, on weekends I enjoy climbing the mountain near my house.
>> I also enjoy climbing the mountain near my house on weekends. 
During spring season, I could observe various flowers in the mountain.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
In contrast, I admire the scenery with red or yellow-colored leaves on autumn.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
Like this, I like to do outdoor activities, but, I prefer enjoying indoor activities to outdoor activities.
>> If it's like this, I like to do outdoor activities, but, I prefer enjoying indoor activities to outdoor activities.
There are too many variables to do outdoor activites according to the weather.
>> There are too many variables to consider in doing outdoor activites according to the weather.
When it rains outside, it is difficult to do outdoor activities.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
In addition, summer is too hot and humid to go outside, and winter is so cold that I love to stay indoors.
>> In addition, it's too hot and humid to go outside in summer, and winter is so cold that I love to stay indoors. 
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