¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Today\'s homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÀÌ*µµ
2023-09-02 1839

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples.

pets are good for children. But they must be under control.
Free pets are so dangerous. they bite children's hands, necks, and faces.
Also their poop is very dirty and bad for children's clean.
If we use tool such as leash, muzzle and pad, they will be their's friends.
So, We have to be them under control.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi there Lee! Nice one for your homework! I hope you'll keep learning through writing and speaking. Make your roommate's comment as your motivation! You got this! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Pets are good for children. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But they must be under control.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Free pets are so dangerous.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> Domestic pets are so dangerous too. 
They bite children's hands, necks, and faces.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Also their poop is very dirty and bad for children's clean.
>>> Also their waste is very dirty and it's bad for children's health.
If we use tool such as leash, muzzle and pad, they will be their friends.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
So, We have to be them under control.
>>> So, we have to be with them for them to be under control.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
127540 homework 04.17 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 871
127539 What comes to mind when you hear the word ¡®socialism¡¯? ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 4
127538 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 0
127537 What talent do you wish you¡¯d have? ±è*ÀÎ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 1
127536 Homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 0
127535 If you were a billionaire what will you do with your money? ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 0
127534 Would you prefer to live in a really old historical city, or a... ±è*¸§ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 805
127533 Monday Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 810
127532 Homework Àå*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 2
127531 How has the global pandemic affected the employment market in... Ȳ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 930
127530 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 712
127529 which greetings are typical in your country?/ why greetings are... ±Ç*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 3
127528 Homework ½Å*È­ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 691
127527 Home work ±è*¶õ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 1
127526 Do you agree that a student¡¯s bullying records should reflect... Ȳ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 1063
127525 Essay homework (04/17) ÃÖ*Çå ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 875
127524 Alone ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 0
127523 4.17 homework ±Ç*¸² ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 910
127522 What are the reasons we visit art museums? õ*¶õ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 2
127521 Do you think studying the grammar of your native language is... õ*¶õ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 2

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04