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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples.

pets are good for children. But they must be under control.
Free pets are so dangerous. they bite children's hands, necks, and faces.
Also their poop is very dirty and bad for children's clean.
If we use tool such as leash, muzzle and pad, they will be their's friends.
So, We have to be them under control.

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Hi there Lee! Nice one for your homework! I hope you'll keep learning through writing and speaking. Make your roommate's comment as your motivation! You got this! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Pets are good for children. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But they must be under control.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Free pets are so dangerous.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> Domestic pets are so dangerous too. 
They bite children's hands, necks, and faces.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Also their poop is very dirty and bad for children's clean.
>>> Also their waste is very dirty and it's bad for children's health.
If we use tool such as leash, muzzle and pad, they will be their friends.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
So, We have to be them under control.
>>> So, we have to be with them for them to be under control.
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