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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of spending holidays with your family, with your friends, or alone?

On normal holidays, we spend out free time.
In my case, it's depends on the date of the holiday.
On short holiday, I like to take a rest alone.
Because, during the short day when I go trip with my friends or family, I feel stacking up tired.
So I don't prefer to travel on short holidays.
On the contrary, if the holiday is long date, go on a short trip with my friends or family.
The reason is that normal day everyone is having a busy time, so it's difficult to go on a trip with together.
However, everyone also wants go to travel on long date holidays.
There are many people everywhere on holiday.
So it's hard to trip on holidays.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of spending holidays with your family, with your friends, or alone?


On normal holidays, we spend out free time.
>> On normal holidays, we spend our free time going out.
In my case, it's depends on the date of the holiday.
>> In my case, it depends on the date of the holiday.
On short holiday, I like to take a rest alone.
>> On short holidays, I like to take a rest alone.
Because, during the short day when I go trip with my friends or family, I feel stacking up tired.
>> Because, during the short day when I go on a trip with my friends or family, I feel stacked-up tired.
So I don't prefer to travel on short holidays.
>> CORRECT!
On the contrary, if the holiday is long date, go on a short trip with my friends or family.
>> On the contrary, if the holiday is on a long date, I go on a short trip with my friends or family.
The reason is that normal day everyone is having a busy time, so it's difficult to go on a trip with together.
>> The reason is that on normal days, everyone is having a busy time, so it's difficult to go on a trip together.
However, everyone also wants go to travel on long date holidays.
>> However, everyone also wants go travel on long-day holidays.
There are many people everywhere on holiday.
>> There are many people everywhere on holidays.
So it's hard to trip on holidays.
>> So it's hard to go on a trip on holidays.

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