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I worry about our products and food including sea food.

But the reason is not only the treated water but also environment destruction.

We are eating already many contaminated food, processed food and instant food that harm to the body.

People blame the treated wate more than necessary.

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Hello there, Ms. Lily!
How have you been?
Thank you that despite being busy, you still find ways to answer the question that I gave you because our class time is really limited and we don't get a chance to discuss more about the topic. 
See you later!
Aki~

I worry about our products and food including sea food.
>>> CORRECT!

But the reason is not only the treated water but also environment destruction.
>>> CORRECT!

We are eating already many contaminated food, processed food and instant food that harm to the body.
>>> We are eating already many contaminated food, processed food and instant food that harm to the body.

People blame the treated water more than necessary.
>>> CORRECT!

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