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Korean¡¯s obesity is increasing these days.
Originally it caused by genetic from their parents.
But thesedays eating style caused obesity.
There were many side dishes in Korea.
Most of them were made of plants.
But nowadays people prefer food that is made from meats,flour and oil.

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Happy Friday, Ms. Sunny!
They said that you become what you eat. We all have our cravings but we need to consider moderate eating especially if the food that we like brings more negative things in our body than good ones.
Stay well
Aki~


Korean¡¯s obesity is increasing these days.
>>> Korean obesity is increasing these days.

Originally it caused by genetic from their parents.
>>> Originally it was caused by genetics from their parents.

But thesedays eating style caused obesity.
>>> But these days eating style has caused obesity.

There were many side dishes in Korea.
>>> CORRECT!

Most of them were made of plants.
>>> CORRECT!

But nowadays people prefer food that is made from meats, flour and oil.
>>> CORRECT!

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