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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the details you need to know when going on a business trip?

When we go on a business trip, there are many things to prepare.
The most important details are the purpose and reason.
Through the purpose and reason, we know that we need to prepare.
Next detail is think about is the client's response.
When we do business deal with a client, we want a profitable deal.
But, an ideal deal is not easy.
Sometimes, unexpected client's response make we are business to fail.
So, we are think about the client's various response and consider variety suggestions.
And prevent unexpected reactions.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the details you need to know when going on a business trip?


When we go on a business trip, there are many things to prepare.
>> CORRECT!
The most important details are the purpose and reason.
>> CORRECT!
Through the purpose and reason, we know that we need to prepare.
>> CORRECT!
Next detail is think about is the client's response.
>> The next detail to consider is to think about the client's response.
When we do business deal with a client, we want a profitable deal.
>> When we do a business deal with a client, we want a profitable deal.
OR >> When we do business deals with clients, we want a profitable deal.
But, an ideal deal is not easy.
>> CORRECT!
Sometimes, unexpected client's response make we are business to fail.
>> Sometimes, unexpected client's response make us feel that the business will fail.
So, we are think about the client's various response and consider variety suggestions.
>> So, we think about the client's various responses and consider variety of suggestions.
And prevent unexpected reactions.
>> We also have to prevent unexpected reactions.
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