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Answer for My birthday

작성자: 이*윤
2023-08-30 597

회원님의 영작문

First of all, I am grateful for being born healthy and I think it's the most special day of the year. Because it's only once a year, everyone say congratulations to me and hear me say dcongratulations. It's a very happy and bless day. I think it's a day full of joy in many ways.

If I think about the past, my perspective on birthdays has changed as I get older.
When I was baby, it was just a happy day. And it was a fun day to have a birthday party with all my friends when I was in elementary school. When I was a middle school student, I was sad that I couldn't spend my birthday with my friends because I was on vacation. And I was in high school either, I couldn't enjoy my birthday because of college entrance exams.
Now I think it's a day where I say thank you to my parents rather than being congratulated on my birthday. Because I am a premature baby born when I was 8 months pregnant. I always feel grateful to my parents because I know how hard it's to protect, give birth to children.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good morning, Yun! Happiest birthday! You are thoughtful and a great child to your parents. I know they are also lucky to have such a loving and kind daughter. I wish you the best always, and have a wonderful day! 
~T. Jade^^
First of all, I am grateful for being born healthy and I think it's the most special day of the year.

>> Correct

Because it's only once a year, everyone say congratulations to me and hear me say dcongratulations.

>> Because it's only once a year, I hear everyone saying congratulations to me.

It's a very happy and bless day.

>> It's a very happy and blessed day. 

I think it's a day full of joy in many ways.

>> Correct
If I think about the past, my perspective on birthdays has changed as I get older.

>> Correct
When I was baby, it was just a happy day.

>> When I was a baby, it was just a happy day.

And it was a fun day to have a birthday party with all my friends when I was in elementary school.

>> Correct

When I was a middle school student, I was sad that I couldn't spend my birthday with my friends because I was on vacation.

>> Correct

And I was in high school either, I couldn't enjoy my birthday because of college entrance exams.

>> Also when I was in high school, I couldn't enjoy my birthday because of college entrance exams.
Now I think it's a day where I say thank you to my parents rather than being congratulated on my birthday.

>> Correct

Because I am a premature baby born when I was 8 months pregnant.

>>  Because I was born a premature baby, and my mother was just 8 months pregnant at that time.

>> OR: I was born prematurely when my mother was 8 months pregnant.

I always feel grateful to my parents because I know how hard it's to protect, give birth to children.

>> I always feel grateful to my parents because I know how hard it is to protect and give birth to children.

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