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Planning for our future is very important. If you live by the flow without planning for the future, it will be difficult to prepare for unexpected situations. My husband works two jobs. Still, I am planning to do one other thing. In preparation for the changing times, it is to find something that can be done instead of a job that will decline. And I ask you to find out what you can do, study, and prepare. This is why my husband and I continue to learn and practice hard even after we are over 40 years old.

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Good morning, Eliana.
Thank you for doing your homework ahead of time.
Believe it or not, planning gives lasting results compared to not. I don't follow what others believe like go with the flow, because there are so many things to consider: time, money, effort, and people.
Have a great day!
Aki~

Planning for our future is very important. 
>>> CORRECT!

If you live by the flow without planning for the future, it will be difficult to prepare for unexpected situations. 
>>> CORRECT!

My husband works two jobs. 
>>> CORRECT!

Still, I am planning to do one other thing. 
>>> CORRECT!

In preparation for the changing times, it is to find something that can be done instead of a job that will decline. 
>>> CORRECT!

And I ask you to find out what you can do, study, and prepare. 
>>> CORRECT!

This is why my husband and I continue to learn and practice hard even after we are over 40 years old.
>>> CORRECT!

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