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HOMEWORK for 06/28
Write 5-10 sentences
TOPIC: How do you try to achieve the goals that you have? Do you feel any pressure in doing it? Why do you think so?


I have many goals amomg that I want freedom of money so I have to working and I feel pressure for my goal like if I don't successfully? maybe a lot of people around me they will not live to me?

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Hello, Min Seog! I would like to thank you for always doing your homework diligently. You are getting better in communicating your ideas as clearly as possible. Let's just continue to work on more in all aspects of your skills in English. See you in class! ~ T. Marie ^^ 
I have many goals amomg that I want freedom of money so I have to working and I feel pressure for my goal like if I don't successfully? 
>> I have many goals.
>> Among them, I want to have financial freedom, so I have to work hard. 
>> I can feel the pressure for my goal, like what I am not successful?
maybe a lot of people around me they will not live to me?
>> Maybe a lot of people around would not like to live with me? 
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