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The waiter was too rude and you would be felt shocked at that day. .I think the waiter was not professional.
People who work at the restaurant should be polite and appreciate to the gust.
I Agee with your last sentence, so I don¡¯t tell the waiter to served my dish quickly.

Young people are hot tempered like hamburger.
They prefer comfortableness and they are not patient. About 10 years ago , There was a popular saying in Korea. ¡°I don¡¯t care.¡±
It is only that They never interested in the old culture.

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Good morning, Ms. Sunny!
Well, we all have our bad days. Hopefully one' bad day will not ruin one's good day :)
See you in class!
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The waiter was too rude and you would be felt shocked at that day. 
>>> The waiter was very rude and you would have felt shocked on that day

I think the waiter was not professional.
>> CORRECT!

People who work at the restaurant should be polite and appreciate to the gust.
>>> People who work at the restaurant should be polite and appreciative to the guests.

I Agee with your last sentence, so I don¡¯t tell the waiter to served my dish quickly.
>>> I agree with your last sentence, so I don¡¯t tell the waiter to serve my dish quickly.

Young people are hot tempered like hamburger.
>>> Young people are hot-tempered like hamburgers.

They prefer comfortableness and they are not patient. 
>>>  They prefer comfort and are not patient.
>>> They prefer being comfortable and are not patient.

About 10 years ago, There was a popular saying in Korea. ¡°I don¡¯t care.¡±
>> CORRECT!


It is only that They never interested in the old culture.
>>>  It is only that they are never interested in the old culture

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