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My role model is Korean singer Hyori Lee.
She is someone who enjoys what she does and is confident in her own style.
Her fashion style is also my favorite. When I'm hip, I'm hip, and depending on the situation, I enjoy a comfortable and rustic style.
And it is said that he is preparing to compete with himself in his heyday on the TV stage for the first time in a long time, rather than competing with young and popular celebrities these days.
And she has been steadily improving herself without neglecting her workouts.
She also shook off courtship from nice men and married a singer, a plain, unpopular outwardly mismatched male singer. They do not care about the eyes of others and live their lives in their own style.
Her living style, her beliefs she talks about on TV, and the attitude she treats others are similar to the direction I live, and it's a mindset I want to follow.

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Hi, Eliana!
Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed reading this composition today and it was entertaining for me.
Enjoy the day!
Aki~

My role model is Korean singer Hyori Lee.
>>> CORRECT!

She is someone who enjoys what she does and is confident in her own style.
>>> CORRECT!

Her fashion style is also my favorite. When I'm hip, I'm hip, and depending on the situation, I enjoy a comfortable and rustic style.
>>> CORRECT!

And it is said that he is preparing to compete with himself in his heyday on the TV stage for the first time in a long time, rather than competing with young and popular celebrities these days.
>>> It is said that he is preparing to compete with himself in his heyday on the TV stage for the first time in a long time, rather than competing with young and popular celebrities these days.

And she has been steadily improving herself without neglecting her workouts
>>> CORRECT!

She also shook off courtship from nice men and married a singer, a plain, unpopular outwardly mismatched male singer.
>>> CORRECT!

 They do not care about the eyes of others and live their lives in their own style.
>>> CORRECT!!

Her living style, her beliefs she talks about on TV, and the attitude she treats others are similar to the direction I live, and it's a mindset I want to follow.
>>> Her living style, the beliefs she talks about on TV, and the attitude she treats others are similar to the direction I live, and it's a mindset I want to follow.
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