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Hey.
It's Monday again.
Time always flies.
It means I am always busy doing something and I am living my life well.
You and I work and live in different places and fields, but we try to develop ourselves or circumstances.
What will we do after ten years?
I hope that we will do everthing that we want to.
Since it's rainy outside, there's only a few patients in the clinic.
Hence, Dr.MJ seems to be sad.
There is another news to make him upset.
Do you remember Dr. Bae?
He is now in charge of the clinic that we worked before.
Lately, he bought a lifting device that is the same as ours.
He posted on the homepage that there is a huge discount with the device related treatment in his clinic without any notification to us.
I heard that the situation of his clinic became worse after we left.
However, this isn't ettiquett in our field.
Meanwhile, I often dream a dream, especially when I was nervous about something.
I think that my nightmares mostly were related with my bad feelings.
See you.

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Hello, Dr. Kim!

If I learned something very valuable from you, it is being highly consistent about the things we love to do on a daily basis. I have been passionate about how I conduct my work, relationship with people as well as all the rest of the activities in a day. Yet, knowing you and your family going strong, owning a building and a business, having great friends to enjoy life with, among others are even what I have. With these, you are quite admirable in your daily dealings.

Soon enough, you will play the guitar-one thing you love. In ten years, the children have grown up and we may have more time to think about our own lives.

Anyway, of course, I remember Dr. Bae. It is unfortunate that his clinic is not performing well lately and gives some promotional discount. Since his clinic is earning less, he is resulting to desperate situations to attract more clients. I feel bad for him. I wonder if you will do this too in the future when you do not have many patient anymore.

Finally, one good thing about dreams is that they are not real. Sometimes, they are too complicated and unrealistic. They are so petrifying as well such as having nightmares.

If you take a look at your sentences, you can notice that you made so many correct sentences. A word spelling as well as the verb in present tense are the only suggestions I made. You have done an outstanding job!

I hope that you had a good day overall.

See you again soon!

-T. Donna~

Hey.
>> Correct!

It's Monday again.
>> Correct!

Time always flies.
>> Correct!

It means I am always busy doing something and I am living my life well.
>> Correct!

You and I work and live in different places and fields, but we try to develop ourselves or circumstances.
>> Correct!

What will we do after ten years?
>> Correct!

I hope that we will do everthing that we want to.
>> Correct!
Or: everything

Since it's rainy outside, there's only a few patients in the clinic.
>> Correct!

Hence, Dr.MJ seems to be sad.
>> Correct!

There is another news to make him upset.
>> Correct!

Do you remember Dr. Bae?
>> Correct!

He is now in charge of the clinic that we worked before.
>> Correct!

Lately, he bought a lifting device that is the same as ours.
>> Correct!

He posted on the homepage that there is a huge discount with the device related treatment in his clinic without any notification to us.
>> Correct!

I heard that the situation of his clinic became worse after we left.
>> Correct!

However, this isn't ettiquett in our field.
>>  However, this isn't an etiquette in our field.

Meanwhile, I often dream a dream, especially when I was nervous about something.
>> Correct!
Or: Meanwhile, I often dream, especially when I am nervous about something.

I think that my nightmares mostly were related with my bad feelings.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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