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What is one thing that you changed your mind about? Why did you change your mind?

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"When you think you are slow, you are faster than ever."
I've never thought like that until last year.
I was always regretful when I wanted to do something.
"I am too late to start this.", "I am too old to do this." like this..

However, my mom started to go to middle school from this year.
Actually my mom just graduated elementary school only.
That was the reason of her inferiority complex in all her life and she decided to apply middle school even though she was 57 years old.
My mom said I also can start anything that I want to and I am 25 years younger than her!
I realised that every moment when I hesitate to start something was not a matter of timing.
If I think that I can do it, it is really becoming true.

Now, I decided to study English for studying abroad, although many people think it is too late, I don't care them.
I just believe I can do it, and I don't want to regret later that I didn't start this.

My mom changed my mind so that I'm really appreciated to her.

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Hi Elaine!
I would say that you really work hard.
I know that you have a busy life.
I appreciate that you're writing to improve yourself.
You're showing your commitment to develop yourself.
Keep it up!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
"When you think you are slow, you are faster than ever."
>> Correct
I've never thought like that until last year.
>> I had never thought like that until last year.
I was always regretful when I wanted to do something.
>> Correct
"I am too late to start this.", "I am too old to do this." 
>> Correct
like this..
>> That's what I thought.
However, my mom started to go to middle school from this year.
>> Correct
Actually my mom just graduated elementary school only.
>> Correct
That was the reason of her inferiority complex in all her life and she decided to apply middle school even though she was 57 years old.
>> That was the reason for her inferiority complex all her life and she decided to apply to middle school even though she was 57 years old.
My mom said I also can start anything that I want to and I am 25 years younger than her!
>> My mom said I can also start anything that I want to and I am 25 years younger than her!
I realised that every moment when I hesitate to start something was not a matter of timing.
>> I realized that every moment that I hesitated to start something was not a matter of timing.
If I think that I can do it, it is really becoming true.
>> If I think that I could do it, it would really become true.
Now, I decided to study English for studying abroad.
>> Now, I decided to study English for my studies abroad.
although many people think it is too late, I don't care them.
>> Although many people think it is too late, I don't care about them.
I just believe I can do it, and I don't want to regret later that I didn't start this.
>> Correct
My mom changed my mind so that I'm really appreciated to her.
>> My mom changed my mind so I really appreciate her.
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