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2023-08-27 911

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Hi.
Fortunately, the number of patients has increased since last Friday.
Thus, Dr.MJ looks so happy these days.
Yesterday, I visited my friend's house with my family.
He is a dermatologic doctor like me.
He served many delicious foods, of course with whiskey.
We enjoyed drinking, eating, and talking.
There is only one table for us, so four kids who includes his one daughter ate chinese food in the bottom of the room.
It looked very funny, and kids enjoyed this special experience.
It was a great time for us.
I have a good news.
After a long time, I met a client who speaks English.
She is a flight attendant and works at Singapore Airline and she is from Taiwan.
She has many acne lesions on her face, so I gave her some treatments including extraction, laser, and injection.
I aksed her if she can come to our clinic again, and she replied that she isn't sure if she can do it.
Meanwhile, it is too difficult to understand my homework.
Please explain to me in detail next class.
See you.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

Congratulations to you and your whole team for having more clients over the weekend! Every day is not the same. When it rains it pours- both the good and the bad. Yet, staying outstanding is one thing we can choose to do. People remember a great service and result. Dr. MJ's happiness may be full to the brim.

Meanwhile, your family time creates a perfect balance after a week. You can engage in quality conversations while your children can maximize their playtime. You are living the life! I wish you more of these kinds of days ahead. 

For the Taiwanese Singapore Airlines crew, I guess she is beautiful. All flight attendants look great and having an acne breakout is not quite acceptable in their work field. It is very good to know that you can apply your English skills every now and then in your medical profession. Since she is Taiwanese (Chinese) she will not go back to your clinic. I know Chinese people. ^^

The homework question just means that there are some good advice that we do not follow sometimes. So, was there any that you did not listen to before?

Your sentences a very high frequency of correctness. Study your longest sentence closely and note down my suggestions there. Your work is superb!

See you then.

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

Fortunately, the number of patients has increased since last Friday.
>> Correct!

Thus, Dr.MJ looks so happy these days.
>> Correct!

Yesterday, I visited my friend's house with my family.
>> Correct!

He is a dermatologic doctor like me.
>> Correct!
 
He served many delicious foods, of course with whiskey.
>> Correct!

We enjoyed drinking, eating, and talking.
>> Correct!

There is only one table for us, so four kids who includes his one daughter ate chinese food in the bottom of the room.
>> There is only one table for us, so the four kids who include his one daughter ate Chinese food at the bottom of the room.

It looked very funny, and kids enjoyed this special experience.
>> Correct!

It was a great time for us.
>> Correct!

I have a good news.
>> Correct!

After a long time, I met a client who speaks English.
>> Correct!

She is a flight attendant and works at Singapore Airline and she is from Taiwan.
>> Correct!

She has many acne lesions on her face, so I gave her some treatments including extraction, laser, and injection.
>> Correct!

I aksed her if she can come to our clinic again, and she replied that she isn't sure if she can do it.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, it is too difficult to understand my homework.
>> Correct!
 
Please explain to me in detail next class.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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