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Which one is more important? Physical or mental health?

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Human is a precisely made creature. It can both think and act as its needs required. Although it depends on what comes on head first either physical ability or mental one personally, I think a neuron system that can conduct every person's mentality is more important than any other physical features. All motions that human demonstrate are based on a person's brain and it is closely related to how this human-being thinks. It means mental motivation is stronger than physical one. According to the studies, without the mental control tower, human body cannot make any movement and the body decomposed in a sudden. I understand that physical appearance is one of the most noticeable features in our body. However it is all begun from the mental tower that manages how body works.

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Human is a precisely made creature. 
>>> correct   
It can both think and act as its needs required. 
>>> OR: It can both think and act as required by its needs.   
Although it depends on what comes on head first either physical ability or mental one personally, I think a neuron system that can conduct every person's mentality is more important than any other physical features. 
>>> OR: Although it depends on what comes first between physical ability or mental one personally, I think a neuron system that can conduct every person's mentality is more important than any other physical features.  
All motions that human demonstrate are based on a person's brain and it is closely related to how this human-being thinks. 
>>>  OR: All actions that a human conducts are based on the person's brain and it is closely related to how this human-being thinks.  
It means mental motivation is stronger than physical one. 
>>>  correct    
According to the studies, without the mental control tower, human body cannot make any movement and the body decomposed in a sudden. 
>>>  correct     
I understand that physical appearance is one of the most noticeable features in our body. 
>>>    correct   
However it is all begun from the mental tower that manages how body works.
>>> However, it all begins from the mental tower that manages how the body works.  
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