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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people think it¡¯s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it¡¯s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

I think that we need friends who disagree with me.
Argument makes our life more rich . If there aren't arguments, our life stop developing.
Although debates have problem that makes our fight, it must need each other.
For example, The king who love flattery in Joseon dynasty avoids to debate.
And then the kingdom fallen down their country.
But, The king Seojong, 4th king in Joseon like arguments, and they open official dabating battle which call '°æ¿¬'.
So, untill he dead, Joseon is rich.
In short, people who have opposite idea make our life better.

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Hi there Lee~!^^ Thanks for your homework again! I hope you'll have a  good day today! Good luck!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think that we need friends who disagree with me.
>>> I think I need a friend who would oppose me. 
Argument makes our life more rich . 
>>> Arguments makes our life better. 
If there aren't arguments, our life stop developing.
>>> If there aren't arguments, our life will stop developing.
Although debates have problem that makes our fight, it must need each other.
>>> Although debates have problem that makes our fight, it needs 2 or more participants. 
For example, the king who loves flattery in Joseon dynasty avoids to debate.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
And then the kingdom fallen down their country.
>>> And then the kingdom has fallen.
But, The king Seojong, 4th king in Joseon like arguments, and they open official dabating battle which call '°æ¿¬'.
>>> However,  King Seojong, the 4th king in Joseon liked arguments, and they opened an official debate battle which was called '°æ¿¬'.
So, untill he dead, Joseon is rich.
>>> So, until he died, Joseon has been so rich. 
In short, people who have opposite idea make our life better.
>>> In short, people who have opposite ideas make our lives better.
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