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Mental health is more important than mental health. Even if you are physically healthy, you wouldn't get a healthy life if your mind is not healthy. For example, if the mind is not healthy, it can have various mental illnesses such as insomnia or anxiety disorders. On the other hand, if the mind is healthy, physical health can be created anytime. You can become overall healthy by exercising or doing various activities.

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Mental health is more important than mental health. 
>>>  Mental health is more important than physical health. 
Even if you are physically healthy, you wouldn't get a healthy life if your mind is not healthy. 
>>> correct  
For example, if the mind is not healthy, it can have various mental illnesses such as insomnia or anxiety disorders. 
>>>  correct 
>>> OR: For example, if the mind is not healthy, it can lead to various mental illnesses such as insomnia or anxiety disorders.   
On the other hand, if the mind is healthy, physical health can be created anytime. 
>>>   correct 
>>> OR: On the other hand, if the mind is healthy, physical health will follow. 
>>> OR: On the other hand, if the mind is healthy, physical health can be improved.   
You can become overall healthy by exercising or doing various activities.
>>>   correct 
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