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Good evening~
How was your day?
I remember that you were so busy doing your English class all day yesterday.
Meanwhile, I played the guitar after the morning class with you.
I think that I am almost addictive to the guitar.
At lunch time, I practiced to play the guitar without a real guitar; I mean I did it with my empty hands.
Seeing this, Dr. MJ told me that I just looked like a patient with Parkinson disease.
Isn't it funny?
Definately, he is not an ordinary person.
On the other hands, he gave me a Whiskey that I like the best as a present suddenly.
That's why I drank the whiskey with the chicken this evening.
He is a kind of unpredictable man.
As I told you before, there has been only a few patients these days, so I started to worry about it.
I am sure that it will be better soon though.
Regarding my homework, regrets can give us learning always as you told me.
To develop ourselves, we should review our mistakes always.
Regrets are good weapons for human being, I think.
See you.

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Good evening too, Dr. Kim!

I had a smooth-sailing day and so did you. I am as addicted to work as you are addicted to your playing of guitar, I suppose. Maybe as you learn more songs, your fingers will get calloused and your neighbors would start complaining. I'm kidding. ^^

Music can control our lives. The music we listen to really impacts who we are as people and how we feel daily. I have sang songs as a child, played music on the radio for over 15 years and will continue to do so, yet there is always a new song to learn, a new melody to listen to, and a new combination of chords for you to play on your guitar. 

There are many kinds of guitars in the music store nowadays. You can get one and control the volume as you practice at work so that Dr. MJ will not tease you of having Parkinson's Disease. That was a very good one from him thought! ^^

Meanwhile, as autumn will be setting in and winter lurks right after, less people may feel the need to flaunt their beauty. Then, your clinic needs to be ready in this case. Of course, you can train your staff, evaluate your systems as well as brainstorm for ideas on how to make your situation better.

Lastly, regrets can only be useful if we use it as a ladder to better our future.

Your composition is highly comprehensible, sensible, and entertaining. Please take my suggestions well. Excellent work!

See you tomorrow morning!

-T. Donna!

Good evening~
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

I remember that you were so busy doing your English class all day yesterday.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, I played the guitar after the morning class with you.
>> Correct!

I think that I am almost addictive to the guitar.
>> I think that I am almost addicted to the guitar.

At lunch time, I practiced to play the guitar without a real guitar; I mean I did it with my empty hands.
>> Correct!

Seeing this, Dr. MJ told me that I just looked like a patient with Parkinson disease.
>> Seeing this, Dr. MJ told me that I just looked like a patient with Parkinson's disease. 

Isn't it funny?
>> Correct!

Definately, he is not an ordinary person.
>> Correct!
Or: Definitely

On the other hands, he gave me a Whiskey that I like the best as a present suddenly.
>> On the other hand, he gave me a whiskey that I like the best as a present suddenly.

That's why I drank the whiskey with the chicken this evening.
>> That's why I drank the whiskey with chicken this evening.

He is a kind of unpredictable man.
>> He is kind of an unpredictable man.

As I told you before, there has been only a few patients these days, so I started to worry about it.
>> Correct!

I am sure that it will be better soon though.
>> Correct!

Regarding my homework, regrets can give us learning always as you told me.
>> Correct!
Or: Regarding my homework, regrets can always give us learning as you told me.

To develop ourselves, we should review our mistakes always.
>> Correct!

Regrets are good weapons for human being, I think.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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