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To Introduce traditional places in Korea.

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I recommend you to see only one traditional place in Korea is Seoul. There were the capital of Chosun and Backjae.
There are many traditional places such as kyeongbok palace, Kwanghwa gate and Han castle. And Seoul is special because not only traditional but also very modern. You can see two different beauties at same sights.

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Good evening Thomas!

Your answer means that Seoul is already a perfect one stop destination for traditional and contemporary places to discover. I will take your advice and meander and wander there soon. Perhaps, I might feel like I am in the Joseon Dynasty eating takpokki in Gangnam. I cannot wait to be there.

Meanwhile, kindly go over your sentences that have underlined words and analyze how to make them better. Your answer was very informative and useful. 

See you soon!

-T. Donna~

I recommend you to see only one traditional place in Korea is Seoul. 
>> I recommend you to see only one traditional place in Seoul, Korea. 

There were the capital of Chosun and Backjae.
>>  These were the capitals of Chosun and Backjae.

There are many traditional places such as kyeongbok palace, Kwanghwa gate and Han castle. 
>> Correct!
Or: There are many traditional places such as Kyeongbok Palace, Kwanghwa Gate and Han castle. 

And Seoul is special because not only traditional but also very modern.
>> And Seoul is special because there is not only traditional places but also very modern ones 

You can see two different beauties at same sights. 
>> You can see two different beauties at the same sights. 
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