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I think many travelers need various attractions and regional differences.
I think the problem of tour in Korea is be boring.
The reason is the same thing to enjoy, shopping, and same food in any region.
In addition, I think the price of food and accommodation in the tourist area is too expensive.
So, theses days many Koreans go on a near aboard trip instead of domestic trip.
The reason is they think this is more reasonable more than domestic trip.
In conclusion, I think need regional differences and various attraction for Korea tourist.
And, I think Koreans should also be interested in domestic travel to develop Korea tour.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


I think many travelers need various attractions and regional differences.
>> CORRECT!
I think the problem of tour in Korea is be boring.
>> I think the problem of tours in Korea is that, it's boring.
The reason is the same thing to enjoy, shopping, and same food in any region.
>> The reason is that the activities to enjoy are always the same, such as shopping and eating the same food in any regions.
In addition, I think the price of food and accommodation in the tourist area is too expensive.
>> CORRECT!
So, theses days many Koreans go on a near aboard trip instead of domestic trip.
>> So these days many, Koreans go on a trip in nearby countries instead of domestic trips.
The reason is they think this is more reasonable more than domestic trip.
>> The reason is that they think this is more reasonable than domestic trips.
In conclusion, I think need regional differences and various attraction for Korea tourist.
>> In conclusion, I think we need regional differences and various attractions for tourists in Korea.
And, I think Koreans should also be interested in domestic travel to develop Korea tour.
>> And, I think Koreans should also be interested in domestic travel and tours to develop Korean tourism.

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