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Do you think that governments should encourage public transport more?

작성자: 이*양
2023-08-23 2000

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I think it depends on regional traffic situations.
In capital area, there are serious traffic jam all days. So, the goverment should improve public transport in those area. For example, the gold line the busiest subway line in Seoul is crowded especially at rush hour. The goverment sould expand the transportation around goldline area.
And there are not enough parking area in seoul, it cause serious traffic jam also. because there is no parking space, peeple have to park at the side of load.
On the other hand, In local cities, there are no traffic jam except traditional holiday seasons like new-years day and thanksgiving day. And people live local cities usually move by their car. So the goverment don't have to increase the number of public transportation.
But in contryside, the term of public transportaion is very long.
Therefore, I think this issue should be improved situationally by the goverment

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Sophia! Thank you for doing your homework ^^ ~ T.Gelly



I think it depends on regional traffic situations.
>> I think it depends on the regional traffic situation.
In capital area, there are serious traffic jam all days. 
>> In the capital area there are serious traffic jams every day.
So, the goverment should improve public transport in those area. 
>> So the government should improve the public transport in these areas.
For example, the gold line the busiest subway line in Seoul is crowded especially at rush hour. 
>> For example, the Golden Line is the busiest subway line in Seoul and it is crowded especially during rush hours.
The goverment sould expand the transportation around goldline area.
>> The government should expand transportation around the Golden Line area.
And there are not enough parking area in seoul, it cause serious traffic jam also. because there is no parking space, peeple have to park at the side of load.
>> Another thing is that there is not enough parking area in Seoul so it causes serious traffic jams also because some people have to park at the side of the road.
On the other hand, In local cities, there are no traffic jam except traditional holiday seasons like new-years day and thanksgiving day. 
>> On the other hand, there are no traffic jams in the local cities except on holiday seasons like New Year and Thanksgiving day.
And people live local cities usually move by their car. 
>> And people who live in the local cities usually move by cars. 
So the goverment don't have to increase the number of public transportation.
>> That's why the government doesn't have to increase the number of public transportation in these cities.
But in contryside, the term of public transportaion is very long.
>> On the contrary, the countryside has a lot of transportation.
Therefore, I think this issue should be improved situationally by the goverment
>> Therefore, I think this issue should be improved situationally by the government.
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