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How can different generations improve their communication with each other?

작성자: 이*주
2023-08-23 2507

회원님의 영작문

Right after I got this homework, I searched on google how to improve communication across generations.
The one that I found website's introduction is classify the generation with year of birth.
The hilarious point about after reading the article was I knew my generation is Z but I didn't realize my parent's generation is a baby boomer.
And this is the most famous conflict between generation whole over the world.
Have you ever seen the video about "OK, boomer"?
It became famous from a parliament where was the 25-years-old lawmaker saying that meme.
In my opinion, these conflicts have been always there however it does aggravate polarization because sympathized people around the world through the internet such as tiktok or YouTube.

When I search the way to solve this problem, there is only obvious answer that respects other's opinions.
I know it's the most important thing to treat other people, but also it sounds like I have no idea but to entrust the luck from the warmth of the people.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Hyeon Ju!

The dynamics in today’s global workforce are complex and fascinating. There are now four generations working together, and sometimes five. Every generation has its own idiosyncrasies, preferences, and personal goals, which can lead to misunderstandings and even conflicts.

It matters to know the motivations and reasoning behind each generation’s characteristics. One of the best ways to get people to accept each other’s differences is to get them to work together.  All generations want to feel accepted and valued as part of a cohesive society. They need to find common grounds and value communication. Without exception, all of us must be major contributors of kindness, love, and peace.

Lastly, social media should unite and not polarize.

Your sentences are very substantial. The points of your composition are very clear. For longer sentences, they have the tendency to have more mistakes but not in your case. Overall, your work is great! Keep writing.

See you soon!

-T. Donna~

Right after I got this homework, I searched on google how to improve communication across generations.
>> Correct!

The one that I found website's introduction is classify the generation with year of birth.
>> The one that I found on the website's introduction is classifying the generation with year of birth.

The hilarious point about after reading the article was I knew my generation is Z but I didn't realize my parent's generation is a baby boomer.
>> The hilarious point after reading the article was that I knew my generation is Z but I didn't realize my parent's generation is  baby boomer.

And this is the most famous conflict between generation whole over the world.
>> And this is the most famous conflict between generation all over the world.

Have you ever seen the video about "OK, boomer"?
>> Correct!

It became famous from a parliament where was the 25-years-old lawmaker saying that meme.
>>  It became famous from a parliament where there was a 25-years-old lawmaker saying that meme.

In my opinion, these conflicts have been always there however it does aggravate polarization because sympathized people around the world through the internet such as tiktok or YouTube.
>> In my opinion, these conflicts have been always there however it does aggravate polarization because sympathy is gathered from people around the world through the internet such as Tiktok or YouTube.

When I search the way to solve this problem, there is only obvious answer that respects other's opinions.
>> When I search the way to solve this problem, there is only an obvious answer that respects other's opinions.

I know it's the most important thing to treat other people, but also it sounds like I have no idea but to entrust the luck from the warmth of the people.
>> Correct!
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