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It is not right to attribute to self-responsibility like buying self-defense gadgets.

The government should solve this problem by reinforcing the law and public power.

All countries must prioritize people's safety and welfare.

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Good morning, Ms. Lily!
We are in accord about this matter. Citizens are not responsible to buy something to protect themselves because sometimes, we don't know how to use them especially when we are in danger.
I like your idea here. Keep it up!
Aki~

It is not right to attribute to self-responsibility like buying self-defense gadgets.
>>> CORRECT!

The government should solve this problem by reinforcing the law and public power.
>>> CORRECT!

All countries must prioritize people's safety and welfare.
>>> CORRECT!
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