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2023-08-22 1195

회원님의 영작문

Hi, T. Donna.
I was so glad to see you again.
I looked forward that moment for about two months.
During the class, you taught me English well and also gave me a comfort and encouragement.
I think you are my teacher and my friend simultaneously.
I've been well.
As you know, I traveled to Sigapore with my mother and my daughter, Irene and we had a blast.
And, I started to grow fish and shrimp.
One day, Rachel received several guppies which are kinds of small fish.
Around two or three years ago, we failed to grow guppies; they all died.
I really wanted to grow them properly, so I purchased many stuff for them; water plant, shrimp, and circulator.
Meanwhile, Dr.MJ started learn an arm fight suddenly.
He told me that he wanted to join the match of it.
He is eccentric for sure, isn't he?
How about you?
Except your son's surgery, were there any special things in your life?
Comparing one year ago from now, I became so confident with English.
I need to learn more and more, though.
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Dr. Kim! It is great to read from you once again on this page.

At last we met again. And just like a long lost friend,  somehow, the schedule was a perfect match and finally, I can ring you up every 7:05 am. It felt like a long time yet time ticked so fast and a couple of extremely hot summer months have gone. I am so ecstatic to hear that you spoke English like a piece of cake in Singapore. Travelling is extremely fun if you can get by easily through your speech. 

I must say I have been well as well. In two months, I have been absent from the radio three times and I was travelling locally with my sisters and our family. We went to a picturesque flower farm, an England inspired hill with a British bus, and gazed at huge kettles and coffee mugs for our first stop. This was two hours away from my city. Next, with my son and first sister, we went to a resort with pools fronting a surfing beach and simply enjoyed the vibe there for two days. Finally, we went to the historical church where the Philippine Independence was signed. Right after, we went to a huge waterpark and saw so many Americans, Chinese, and Koreans there. 

After these, I might get fired if I take another absence from any of my work. Travelling is like an opium that gets me high. I was actually wanting to book a ticket somewhere but the rain poured for three weeks in my city and it felt like forever.  There was a strong typhoon and the monsoon it tagged along imprisoned us for quite some time.

So, your princesses are growing their pets! That is so cute and lovely. Please stay away from them when you drink your whiskey. They may look delicious. ^^

Dr. MJ is definitely eccentric and finding some hobbies to occupy his time is a good thing. I would say, spending time with his son would be meaningful.

I am proud of your consistent growth in English. You still create grammatically organized sentences, smooth transitions, and refined vocabulary. Even more, your "Dr. Kim writing style" is memorable and unique. Keep it up!

See you!

-T. Donna~ 

Hi, T. Donna.
>> Correct!

I was so glad to see you again.
>> Correct!

I looked forward that moment for about two months.
>> I looked forward to that moment for about two months.

During the class, you taught me English well and also gave me a comfort and encouragement.
>> During the class, you taught me English well and also gave me comfort and encouragement.

I think you are my teacher and my friend simultaneously.
>> Correct!

I've been well.
>> Correct!

As you know, I traveled to Sigapore with my mother and my daughter, Irene and we had a blast.
>> Correct!
Or: Singapore

And, I started to grow fish and shrimp.
>> Correct! Wow!

One day, Rachel received several guppies which are kinds of small fish.
>> Correct!

Around two or three years ago, we failed to grow guppies; they all died.
>> Correct!

I really wanted to grow them properly, so I purchased many stuff for them; water plant, shrimp, and circulator.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, Dr.MJ started learn an arm fight suddenly.
>> Correct!

He told me that he wanted to join the match of it.
>> Correct!
Or: He told me that he wanted to join a match.

He is eccentric for sure, isn't he?
>> Correct! 

How about you?
>> Correct!

Except your son's surgery, were there any special things in your life?
>> Except for your son's surgery, were there any special things in your life?

Comparing one year ago from now, I became so confident with English.
>> Correct!
Or: Comparing now from a year ago, I became very confident in English.

I need to learn more and more, though.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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