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How can the world make sure human rights are protected?

작성자: 이*민
2023-08-22 2652

회원님의 영작문

People have a different experience about their life.
because they have a different thought each other. so thinking about human rights is too different.
But I think that human rights should be protected and that first thing is a ‘respect’ to each other.
Respect is a basic communication skill. We Should not think only myself.
And second is a setting a law. People think sometimes their rights that is a absolute.
But the right is not fair about social some weak person.
So government should set a law for their rights.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Su,

I'm glad you shared your thoughts on human rights in your work. You're absolutely right that everyone has unique life experiences and thoughts, which affects how they see things like human rights. I really agree with your point about "respect." It's like a foundation for treating each other well. And you're spot on that it's important to not just think about ourselves, but also consider others. You also brought up the idea of laws, and that's important too. Sometimes, people might think their rights are the most important, but it's not always fair. That's where the government comes in—they can make sure everyone's rights are protected. Your perspective is thoughtful, and it's great to see you thinking about these important issues. Keep up the excellent work!

~Teacher Cathy


People have a different experience about their life. because they have a different thought each other.

>>People have different experiences in life because they have different thoughts from each other.

so thinking about human rights is too different.

>>Therefore, thinking about human rights varies greatly.

But I think that human rights should be protected and that first thing is a ‘respect’ to each other.

>>However, I believe that human rights should be protected, and the first thing to do is to show 'respect' to each other.

Respect is a basic communication skill.

>>Respect forms a fundamental communication skill.

We Should not think only myself.

>>We should not only think about ourselves.

And second is a setting a law.

>>The second aspect involves establishing laws.

People think sometimes their rights that is a absolute. But the right is not fair about social some weak person.

>>People sometimes believe their rights are absolute, but rights aren't always fair, especially for socially vulnerable individuals.

So government should set a law for their rights.

>>Thus, the government should establish laws to safeguard their rights.

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