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I would say that my son has to distinguish
What he could do well and what he would like to.
And I hope my son has a hobby like sports or play the instrument.
Having a hobby makes me fulfilled.
When you have a hard time it will give you a consolation.

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Happy Monday, Ms. Sunny!
Thank you for this. I tried arranging the sequence of your sentence and may this also be one of your patterns that you don't need to make another sentence if the first sentence is not finished yet. Try connecting them to give them a full thought.
Have a great day!
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I would say that my son has to distinguish what he could do well and what he would like to.
>>> I hope that my son has to distinguish what he could do well and what he would like to do.

And I hope my son has a hobby like sports or play the instrument.
>>> And I hope my son has a hobby like sports or playing an instrument.

Having a hobby makes me fulfilled.
>>> Having a hobby makes one feel fulfilled.

When you have a hard time it will give you a consolation.
>>> CORRECT!

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