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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people think that the range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has the opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Advanced technology have been economical gap since starting of mankind.
people who don't have enough money can't take medical services such as vaccine, x-ray, operation, and teeth scaling.
However the gap have been small gradually by welfare policy.
They enjoy technical services for free, and then can help to become social worker.
Maybe, after life change many things. There will be a big gap between the rich and the poor.
But we will overcome.

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Hi there Lee~!^^ Thanks for writing your essay today.  I actually choose questions from the list of IELTS Writing Task 2
from last year until this year. I find the questions really interesting! So enjoy writing too! See you!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Advanced technology have been economical gap since starting of mankind.
>>> Advanced technology has been an economical gap since the start of mankind.
People who don't have enough money can't take medical services such as vaccine, x-ray, operation, and teeth scaling.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However the gap have been small gradually by welfare policy.
>>> However, the gap has been decreasing gradually by welfare policy.
They enjoy technical services for free, and then help to become social worker.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Maybe, after life change many things.
>>> After which, maybe people's life will change a lot. 
 There will be a big gap between the rich and the poor.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But we will overcome.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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