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Is it too late to solve climate change?

작성자: 이*주
2023-08-18 2376

회원님의 영작문

The increase in global average temperature is transforming the environment and threatening entire species, and these are not sudden cautions.
Just like public advertisement that we have seen for a long time is about polar bears have lost their habitat, now it's time to lose our habitat.
The one positive point is life finds a way such as a grolar bear which is grizzly-polar bear hybrid.
One the other side, the negative point is this is the beginning of group assignment with nearly 7 billion people and I have never had a successful group assignment with less than five people.

I don't want to be a pessimist, but there are numerous reasons that can destroy the environment for example, logging for export to developing countries, energy used in industrial production, etc.
Greenhouse gas is indispensable for human beings live and this is why certified emission reduction (CER) exists.
CER can make global warming loosen, but I don't think it solves the climate problems.
We will have to adapt.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good evening, Hyeon Ju!

Your homework is compelling, impactful, and insightful. Climate change is irreversible and whether we admit it or not, we are already experiencing the dreadful effects of it in our daily lives. In a documentary on climate change, it was shown there how man consumed nature and its resources in a very brief span of time. 

As you have expounded below using the bears as concrete reference and example on how habitats vanish, before man knows it, his home may also be gone. This is going to be catastrophic but it will be the nature of the environment. 

Man will probably go back to his nature- the survival of the fittest and the fastest to adapt lives.

Congratulations for an almost perfect composition! 

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

The increase in global average temperature is transforming the environment and threatening entire species, and these are not sudden cautions.
>> Correct!

Just like public advertisement that we have seen for a long time is about polar bears have lost their habitat, now it's time to lose our habitat.
>> Correct!

The one positive point is life finds a way such as a grolar bear which is grizzly-polar bear hybrid.
>> Correct!

One the other side, the negative point is this is the beginning of group assignment with nearly 7 billion people and I have never had a successful group assignment with less than five people.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

I don't want to be a pessimist, but there are numerous reasons that can destroy the environment for example, logging for export to developing countries, energy used in industrial production, etc.
>> Correct!

Greenhouse gas is indispensable for human beings live and this is why certified emission reduction (CER) exists.
>> Greenhouse gas is indispensable for human beings lives and this is why certified emission reduction (CER) exists.

CER can make global warming loosen, but I don't think it solves the climate problems.
>> Correct!

We will have to adapt.
>> Correct!
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