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Acutally I don't know what is the possible benefits of working on weekends. Because I think that many people don't work on weekend and take time for their lives like take a rest, hang out with family or friend and work out for they health. If it work on weekends, it is possible to rest on weekdays, but I think it is best to rest when many people rest. Then we can spend time with my family and friends. One of possilble benefits of working on weekends is few people in good place like restaurant than weekends when we go to good plance on weekdays

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Acutally I don't know what is the possible benefits of working on weekends. Because I think that many people don't work on weekend and take time for their lives like take a rest, hang out with family or friend and work out for they health. 
>>> Actually, I don't know what is the possible benefit of working on weekends because I think that many people don't work on weekends and take time for their personal lives like taking a rest, hanging out with family or friends and working out for their health.   
If it work on weekends, it is possible to rest on weekdays, but I think it is best to rest when many people rest.
>>> If  we work on weekends, it is possible to rest on weekdays, but I think it is best to rest when many people rest.  
Then we can spend time with my family and friends. 
>>> Then we can spend time with our family and friends.   
One of possilble benefits of working on weekends is few people in good place like restaurant than weekends when we go to good plance on weekdays
>>>  One of possible benefits of working on weekends is there are few people in good places like restaurants than weekends.
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