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What makes healthy lifestyle important?

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I personally prefer to live a short life in good health rather than a long life in sickness. Generally people want to live not just long but also healthy, because it¡¯s related to the quality of life. And it¡¯s not only about the quality of one¡¯s life but also the quality of other¡¯s life. I¡¯m sure that my health has a lot to do with the quality of life of others I relate to such as my parents, siblings and friends as well.

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Hello Seung Ki! I agree with you. Our health is wealth. We should take good care of ourselves and for our loved ones too. See you in the class to discuss to have further discussion. Keep safe!~T. Lyn
I personally prefer to live a short life in good health rather than a long life in sickness. 
>>Personally, I prefer a short healthy life to a sickly long life.
Generally people want to live not just long but also healthy, because it¡¯s related to the quality of life. 
>>In general, people want to live long healthy lives because it is directly related to quality of life.
And it¡¯s not only about the quality of one¡¯s life but also the quality of other¡¯s life.
>>And it is not just about one person's quality of life, it's about another person's quality of life.
I¡¯m sure that my health has a lot to do with the quality of life of others I relate to such as my parents, siblings and friends as well.
>>I am convinced that my health has a lot to do with the quality of life of other people related to me, such as my parents. siblings, and friends.
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