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What do you think is an effective way to encourage people to stop smoking?

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What do you think is an effective way to encourage people to stop smoking?
Generally, it is hard to change habits like smoking all the time. It makes our health bad. so it is very effective way to see documentaries that show patients' life in the hospitals who suffers from cigarettes. In my opinion, It will be a good vicarious experience and a shock treatment.

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Thank you for this Miss Jenny. Keep them coming. Have a great weekend! 

 Generally, it is hard to change habits like smoking all the time. 
>>> correct  
>>> OR: It has always been hard to change a habit like smoking.
It makes our health bad. 
>>> correct  
>> OR: It makes us unhealthy.
so it is very effective way to see documentaries that show patients' life in the hospitals who suffers from cigarettes. 
>>> So, it is a very effective way to see documentaries that show patients' lives in the hospitals who suffers from cigarette related diseases.   
In my opinion, It will be a good vicarious experience and a shock treatment.
>>>  correct    

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