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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the positive and negative ways some people choose to deal with stress?a

We face a lot of stress in daily lives.
And many people do hobbies or similar activities for reduce stress.
Most people around me, in a healthy(positive) way for reduce stress.
For example, they usually choose to work out or eat delicious food.
But, occasionally I heard through the news, some people choose the bad ways for reduce stress.
They are alcoholics.
They drink little by little to reduce stress at first time.
But, later they became an alcoholic or get sick because of alcohol.
So, I think anyone who chooses a negative ways will get more stress.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the positive and negative ways some people choose to deal with stress?


We face a lot of stress in daily lives.
>> We face a lot of stress in our daily lives.
And many people do hobbies or similar activities for reduce stress.
>> And many people do hobbies or similar activities to reduce stress.
Most people around me, in a healthy(positive) way for reduce stress.
>> Most people around me reduce their stress in a healthy way.
For example, they usually choose to work out or eat delicious food.
>> CORRECT!
But, occasionally I heard through the news, some people choose the bad ways for reduce stress.
>> But, occasionally I heard through the news, some people choose the bad ways to reduce stress.
OR >> But, occasionally I heard through the news, some people choose the bad ways in reducing stress.
They are alcoholics.
>> CORRECT!
They drink little by little to reduce stress at first time.
>> CORRECT!
But, later they became an alcoholic or get sick because of alcohol.
>> But, later they become an alcoholic or get sick because of alcohol.
So, I think anyone who chooses a negative ways will get more stress.
>> So, I think anyone who chooses negative ways will get more stress.

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