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Hello.
Since my cousin stayed in my room, I couldn't use my computer this morning.
As I told you, I went to the clinic to fix the problem yesterday, in spite of my day-off.
We found the exact reason of the obstruction of pipe.
It resulted from the crack of pipe and the filling of concretes.
I let the technician to change the pipe, and then we found out that all problems were gone.
Last evening, my close cousin came to our house.
She and I enjoyed some wines with delicious foods; raw fish, pasta, and donut.
After eating those, we took a walk in the park near my house.
Also, we rode a boat in the lake of the park.
We really enjoyed it.
Cood air and beautiful night view made us feel best.
I said goodbye to her this morning on my way to the workplace.
Regarding my homework, I sometimes imagine if I can save my thought and memory to Ai.
All we have a fear about the death.
After we died, where will we go?
I saw a movie clip about saving someone's memory into a virtual reality.
See you.

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Hello Dr. Kim. Thank you for this. Good to know the problem in your clinic is now fixed. I hope it continues that way.
So your cousin already left. I hope she enjoyed her stay in Incheon. See you in class then.

Hello.
>>> correct  
Since my cousin stayed in my room, I couldn't use my computer this morning.
>>>  correct   
As I told you, I went to the clinic to fix the problem yesterday, in spite of my day-off.
>>> correct
>>> OR: As I told you, I went to the clinic to fix the problem yesterday, despite of it being my day-off.   
We found the exact reason of the obstruction of pipe.
>>>  We found the exact reason for the obstruction of the pipe. 
It resulted from the crack of pipe and the filling of concretes.
>>> It resulted from the cracking of the pipe and it being filled with concrete.  
I let the technician to change the pipe, and then we found out that all problems were gone.
>>> OR: I let the technician change the pipe, then we found out that all problems were solved.  
Last evening, my close cousin came to our house.
>>>  correct  
She and I enjoyed some wines with delicious foods; raw fish, pasta, and donut.
>>> She and I enjoyed some wine with delicious food such as raw fish, pasta, and donut.  
After eating those, we took a walk in the park near my house.
>>>  correct  
Also, we rode a boat in the lake of the park.
>>>  correct  
We really enjoyed it.
>>> correct   
Cood air and beautiful night view made us feel best.
>>>   The cold air and beautiful night view made us feel best.
>>>  OR: The cold air and beautiful night view made us feel great.
I said goodbye to her this morning on my way to the workplace.
>>>  correct    
Regarding my homework, I sometimes imagine if I can save my thought and memory to AI.
>>>  correct    
All we have a fear about the death.
>>>   We all have fear of death.
After we died, where will we go?
>>>   After we die, where do we go?
I saw a movie clip about saving someone's memory into a virtual reality.
>>>   correct    
See you.
>>>    correct    
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