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I like the country that has high happiness index.
Such is India and Myanma.
I think religion is related to happiness.
Buddhism emphasizes that people have to
remove the greed and every anxiety caused by greed.

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Good day, Ms. Sunny!
Upon reading what you wrote, it made me think why did you not include the Philippines? hahaha! Checking on the internet, Myanmar has the highest index of 117 while India has 126. The top countries are Taiwan and Singapore. I am more curious what made you think of these two countries? Thank you for sharing your thought. see you in class.
Aki~

I like the country that has high happiness index.
>>> CORRECT

Such is India and Myanma.
>>> Such as India and Myanmar.

I think religion is related to happiness.
>>> CORRECT

Buddhism emphasizes that people have to remove the greed and every anxiety caused by greed.
>>>  Buddhism emphasizes that people have to remove greed and every anxiety is caused by it.
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