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What should a person do when he/she if having some trouble sleeping?

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2023-08-16 2138

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If you have some trouble sleeping at night, I suggest taking a walk or working out lightly before going to sleep because physical exercise can help you sleep well. It will be all the more of a help for your sound sleep when it is hot even at night. Besides working out, having warm milk or tea will help you have a good sleep. However, if the symptom is way beyond normal, you can see a doctor about it because your body can need medical treatment. Above all, you have to find the reason why you have difficulty sleeping. Some people take it too seriously to take a medicine, such as a sleeping pill. But according to pundits, proper medical treatment can shorten the period of your suffering from sleeplessness. You don't have to be afraid of some prescription by a doctor.
Let me recap. Anybody can suffer from sleeplessness for various reasons. So, if you have trouble sleeping, be sure to find the reason for it first, and solve the problem step by step without excessive worrying.

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Hi, Steve!

Thank you for answering your homework. Your answers are really meaningful.

~T.Divina^^

Here are some corrections to take note of:

1. If you have some trouble sleeping at night, I suggest taking a walk or working out lightly before going to sleep because physical exercise can help you sleep well.
>>CORRECT!

2.It will be all the more of a help for your sound sleep when it is hot even at night.
>>It will be more helpful for your sound sleep at night when it is hot.

3. Besides working out, having warm milk or tea will help you have a good sleep. 
>>CORRECT!

4. However, if the symptom is way beyond normal, you can see a doctor about it because your body can need medical treatment.
>>However, if the symptom is way beyond normal, you might want to see a doctor because your body might need medical treatment.

5. Above all, you have to find the reason why you have difficulty sleeping.
>>CORRECT!

6. Some people take it too seriously to take a medicine, such as a sleeping pill.
>>Some people take it too seriously by taking medicine like sleeping pills.

7. But according to pundits, proper medical treatment can shorten the period of your suffering from sleeplessness.
>>According to pundits, proper medical treatment can shorten the period of your suffering from sleeplessness.

8. You don't have to be afraid of some prescription by a doctor.
>>You don't have to be afraid of a doctor's prescription.

9. Anybody can suffer from sleeplessness for various reasons.
>>CORRECT!

10. So, if you have trouble sleeping, be sure to find the reason for it first, and solve the problem step by step without excessive worrying.
>>CORRECT!
OR >>So, if you have trouble sleeping, be sure to find the reason for it first, then solve the problem step by step without excessive worrying.
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