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Do you think that governments should encourage public transport more?

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Do you think that governments should encourage public transport more?

Yes, of course. The governments should encourage public transport more.
The traffic jam is too serious during rush hours in Seoul, Korea.
The subway 9 line of Seoul called "subway from hell" during rush hours.
A lot of subways and buses run more.

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Hi, Olivia. Thank you for doing your homework. Please take note of the corrections I made on your sentences. Keep up the good work and see you in class! ^^
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Yes, of course. 
>> Correct
The governments should encourage public transport more.
>> Correct
The traffic jam is too serious during rush hours in Seoul, Korea.
>> Correct
The subway 9 line of Seoul called "subway from hell" during rush hours.
>> The subway Line 9 in Seoul is called the 'subway from hell' during rush hours.
A lot of subways and buses run more.
Correct
OR >> During peak hours, a significant number of subways and buses operate more frequently.
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