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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think people are afraid of getting old?

Most people don't want getting old, they want to stay young and healthy.
The last places most elderly people stay are nursing homes or hospitals.
That's why it is difficult to control body when get old.
So they have to get help from other people.
Other case is olden people have nowhere to go.
In case of Korea, olden people can use public transportation for free.
Their daily routine is sit on the subway and bus all day and look around other people.
Or their spend time with similar situation people in subway and go back home at night.
Many people think that their future will be similar to the current old people.
And sometimes watched that old people have no manners in public area.
That's why many people don't like getting old.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think people are afraid of getting old?


Most people don't want getting old, they want to stay young and healthy.
>> Most people don't want to get old, they want to stay young and healthy.
The last places most elderly people stay are nursing homes or hospitals.
>> CORRECT!
That's why it is difficult to control body when get old.
>> That's why it is difficult to control our bodies as we get old.
So they have to get help from other people.
>> CORRECT!
Other case is olden people have nowhere to go.
>> In other cases, some old people have nowhere to go.
In case of Korea, olden people can use public transportation for free.
>> In case of Korea, old people can use public transportation for free.
OR >> In case of Korea, senior citizens can use public transportation for free.
Their daily routine is sit on the subway and bus all day and look around other people.
>> Their daily routine is to sit on the subway and bus all day and look at other people.
Or their spend time with similar situation people in subway and go back home at night.
>> Sometimes, they spend time with similar situation with people in subway and go back home at night.
Many people think that their future will be similar to the current old people.
>> CORRECT!
And sometimes watched that old people have no manners in public area.
>> And sometimes, they think that watching old people isn't good.
That's why many people don't like getting old.
>> CORRECT!
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