¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2023-08-14 1754

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hello, T. Beth.
How was your weekend?
I wonder what you usually do on weekend.
As you know that, I worked in the clinic this weekend as usual.
There was nothing special in the clinic.
Meanwhile, I invited my friend's family yesterday.
He is one of my closeast friend.
He has a lovely baby who is now only two years old.
My wife and I prepared raw fish and pork.
We had a blast after a long time.
My friend and I drank too much whiskey.
That's why I am so tired now.
I hope I won't have a hangover in the morning.
As for my homework, there will be many changes about technology in the future.
About my work, many AI program will replace doctors.
Instead of many devices, some kind of simple device will be developed and it will make many people can diagnose and treat their body.
In addition, some kind of ointment will replace many treatment and make-up for our face.
Furthermore, magnetic auto car will drive by itself.
Many foods will be replaced by artificial ingredients.
See you in the morning.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Thank you for this Dr. Kim. My weekend is mostly dedicated with doing chores such as laundry and cleaning. There's always chores to do. I also spend time with my dog. I am raising a Pomeranian. She is like my child. I bathe her, feed her and take her out for a walk.

Hello, T. Beth.
>>>  correct 
How was your weekend?
>>>  correct   
I wonder what you usually do on weekend.
>>>  correct   
As you know that, I worked in the clinic this weekend as usual.
>>>  As you already know, I worked in the clinic this weekend as usual. 
There was nothing special in the clinic.
>>>  correct   
Meanwhile, I invited my friend's family yesterday.
>>> correct    
He is one of my closest friend.
>>>   correct  
He has a lovely baby who is now only two years old.
>>>  correct   
My wife and I prepared raw fish and pork.
>>>  correct   
We had a blast after a long time.
>>> correct    
My friend and I drank too much whiskey.
>>>   correct  
That's why I am so tired now.
>>> correct    
I hope I won't have a hangover in the morning.
>>>  correct   
As for my homework, there will be many changes about technology in the future.
>>> correct  
>>> OR:   As for my homework, there will be many changes with technology in the future.
About my work, many AI program will replace doctors.
>>> About my work, many AI programs will replace doctors.  
Instead of many devices, some kind of simple device will be developed and it will make many people can diagnose and treat their body.
>>> Instead of many devices, some kind of simple devices will be developed and it will make many people be able to  diagnose and treat their body.
>>> OR:  Instead of many devices, some kind of simple devices will be developed and it will allow people to make self-diagnosis and self-treatment.
In addition, some kind of ointment will replace many treatment and make-up for our face.
>>>  correct   
Furthermore, magnetic auto car will drive by itself.
>>>  correct   
Many foods will be replaced by artificial ingredients.
>>>   correct     
See you in the morning.
>>>    correct    
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
132843 homework Á¤*¾È ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 0
132842 HOMEWORK: Please write a short paragraph about \"Is it important... ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 0
132841 Homework ±è* ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 0
132840 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 1256
132839 Do parents treat all their kids the same way, or do they treat... ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 1129
132838 What I need right now. ±è*ºó ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 0
132837 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 1369
132836 When I went to the cinema the first time ¹Ú*À² ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 1237
132835 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 0
132834 To be healthy ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 999
132833 What is the most beautiful place in Australia you have ever... ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 771
132832 Regrets for leaving current building ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 772
132831 Do politicians and the rich and famous have more rights than we... À±*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 1
132830 Can you tell me the methods for keeping food materials? Á¤*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 1627
132829 thank you ¼Û*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 2
132828 Homework 2 ±Ç*Å ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 1322
132827 Can you tell me the concept of tourism? Á¤*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 782
132826 I\'d appreciate it if you could correct it quickly. ¼Û*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 6
132825 I\'d appreciate it if you could correct it quickly. ¼Û*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 6
132824 Do you keep a journal or diary? ±Ç*Áö ¿Ï·á 2023-11-29 862

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04