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2023-08-13 1908

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I am looking for the right girl as blow.
First, She must to be honest. I don't aspect lies.
Secondly, We have to solve problems together. So I hope her to think logically.
Finally, She likes Running or the other exercise. I would like to do exercise together.
And I want to avoid that like of a girl such as smoking, having large size of tattoos and having dogs.

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Hi again, Thomas!

Looking for the perfect person to love may take time for some. They say it is one of the most agonizing moments yet, worth the wait. Nevertheless, in your case, this may be true since you have to start from scratch and find that one great love out there.

Anyway, I strongly agree that a person needs to be truthful. This denotes one's confidence and integrity. If we cannot be honest, we cannot be confident to be in a relationship. Moreover, exercising or staying active is also one big factor since you are always on the go.

I am sad that having dogs is on your ban list. Perhaps, you can rethink this part. Well, these are your personal preferences, thus, I hope that you will meet this last who qualifies to all of your standards.

Kindly go over my suggestions below. Some are simple incorrect capitalization or pluralization of nouns. Overall, you wrote with passion and honestly. Very good!

-T. Donna~

I am looking for the right girl as blow.
>> I am looking for the right girl as ______(fill in a better word on the blank).

First, She must to be honest. I don't aspect lies.
>> First, she must be honest. I don't expect lies.

Secondly, We have to solve problems together. So I hope her to think logically.
>> Correct!
Or: Secondly, we have to solve problems together. 

Finally, She likes Running or the other exercise. I would like to do exercise together.
>> Finally, she must like running or the other exercises.

And I want to avoid that like of a girl such as smoking, having large size of tattoos and having dogs.
>> Correct!
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